lol AH HA!anonymous readerReport 2013-04-01 01:46:49Must work on that shifting point of view. Very difficult to follow when jumping POV multiple times per line. Porn Thanks for sharing this.anonymous readerReport 2013-03-31 19:08:28Great story. Please continue the story?«12» Very difficult to follow when jumping POV multiple times per line. Very difficult to follow when jumping POV multiple times per line. Work on your structure like others have said and and bring on #2.anonymous readerReport 2013-03-31 19:21:16Story is excellent, definitily worthy of more chapters!!! Work on your structure like others have said and and bring on #2.anonymous readerReport 2013-03-31 19:21:16Story is excellent, definitily worthy of more chapters!!! Please continue the story?«12» Please continue the story?«12» lol AH HA!anonymous readerReport 2013-04-01 01:46:49Must work on that shifting point of view.
