The story has potential, but the spelling, grammar, and technical details were horrendous and ought to be checked before publishing.anonymous readerReport 2011-05-12 10:28:23IJWTS wow! to the author i would advise reading over what you write and making sure it sounds right and try to add more to the sex… Tube8.com but i get what you mean… to the author i would advise reading over what you write and making sure it sounds right and try to add more to the sex… but i get what you mean… {intentional words} I joust love when the word is spelled write, butt utterly the rung won to use their.anonymous readerReport 2011-04-14 23:07:37kinda harsh Ghostrider939… to the author i would advise reading over what you write and making sure
