A bit of editing, and this story would be fabulous.anonymous readerReport 2013-06-15 01:14:39Giant wall of solid text = not even attempting to read since author didn’t even attempt to make it readable. What are they teaching kids these days?anonymous readerReport 2013-06-15 02:21:21I really liked the story, but the other commenters notes about the solid wall of text is quite true. Porn video I got lost within the first 15 sentences – not worth the time to try and follow – – punctuation really helps if you really want it to be read«1» What are they teaching kids these days?anonymous readerReport 2013-06-15 02:21:21I really liked the story, but the other commenters notes about the solid wall of text is quite true.
