You made several wrong choices in word selection (i.e. You made several wrong choices in word selection (i.e. XXX You apparently don’t know when to use ‘its’ (possessive) and when to use ‘it’s’ (contraction of ‘it is’. ‘Its tits WHERE tightly…and THE tied…’, ‘…before the house went QUITE.’,
‘It felt hands on IT body…’, ‘Dinner is SERVICED…’, ‘…before BRING it to…’, etc, etc. So how a pet should be treated and how my MASTER is with me. Such poor writing makes your story unenjoyable reading.anonymous readerReport 2011-08-11 02:05:09I liked it very much. You made several wrong choices in word selection (i.e. 3 comments«1»anonymous readerReport 2013-04-07 14:21:41Poor writing. Most of these errors could be corrected by proof-reading by a literate person BEFORE submitting your work.
