You just need a proofreader in my opinion.anonymous readerReport 2013-06-13 06:48:44holy shit, sounded great to me at the beginning, near the end I couldn’t stand trying to make sense of it please revise this, or at least make the 2nd chapter tons better than this one because I couldn’t make heads or tales of the story near the endanonymous readerReport 2013-06-13 03:07:42looked like great start to a series however it was soo hard to read, angel to angle, smock as smoke, and soo many others cant read it… Tube8.com Learn to spell, use a spell checker or write in your native language. I was forced to rate your story a ZERO!anonymous readerReport 2013-06-13 07:26:44As everyone else is saying grammer and spelling however I like the story
