I would have written more about what Pam was thinking, and how she came to be dominated. Xxx video The classic example is, “The king died. Then the queen died, of grief.”
Why something happens is very important to story telling. Interesting reasons why, make better stories. I have suggestions to improve your story telling, if you’re happy with how you write, then just ignore the following. Then the queen died.” It’s very rote and dull compared to, “The king died. The story’s big weakness is, each thing happening in the story doesn’t follow in an interesting way. Or revenge of chemical castration by the husband. I have suggestions to improve your story telling, if you’re happy with how you write, then just ignore the
